The Blind Trombonist

I've read the first three chapters and here is what I think so far: You actually remind me of myself as a writer when I was younger, LOL. Writing about ...

1. People often call me the oddball of the school, I have only a few friends, but they’re all the friends I need. It sounds like you just threw these ...

Aw, sweet. Your tone suited the story perfectly--snowy and lilting and dreamy. I found myself irresistably pulled into this, so congratulations. On the side of criticism, I found your dialogue ...

Once you introduced her I had a feeling I knew what she was. Just a few things: -Please, for the love of all angels in heaven, don't start your story ...

Very creative...strange, but in a good way. I don't have much to say except that it did seem to switch points of view, but I think that may have just ...

Chapter 11: Escape! Showdown of Wits! Michael's eyes slowly opened back up and he found himself in a prison cell with his three friends. Zach and Melissa were collapsed on ...

Chapter 10: Danger on Secor Road "Alan Vulner? What was he like?" Michael looked at his dad, who bore a frown upon his face. Hiding his wounds, Michael waited for ...

Chapter 9: Mistaken Identity Chelsea felt the cold metal of the gun pressing on her forehead and started shaking violently. Michael caught a glimpse of Adam as he headed through ...

Chapter 8: Mystery of the Photo Zach looked at Michael and Melissa and sat on the ground in front of them. "I was trapped in a warehouse on Reynolds Road ...

Chapter 7: Surprising Developments Michael yawned and rubbed his tired eyes. He grabbed his glasses off of the headboard of his bed and put them on. He looked around at ...

Chapter 6: Loose in the Warehouse! Zach walked off in the direction that Adam had gone. He knew he had to make sure not to be seen. His own footsteps ...

Chapter 5: Inside Operations James slowly opened his eyes, and was shocked at his new surroundings. "What the hell? Where am I?" The walls around him were all gray and ...

Chapter 4: A New Victim "A-another one?" Michael shuddered, looking at the note's smeared writing. "Motivated more? Could that mean...oh no!" Michael picked up the phone and dialed Melissa's number ...

Chapter 3: A Mysterious Warning "Whoa! Someone is really serious about this!" Melissa said, shuddering as she pulled the arrow out of the wall. She took the note and moved ...

Chapter 2: Unfolding the Notes Michael woke up pretty early, which was easy being as he hadn’t slept one bit the previous night. He quickly yanked the envelope out of ...